Amazingly, This ones not emo...Hope you like the poem! It's called "Mauritius"?

My ancestors roaming from land to land, plain to plain

Now theres no real meaning to my family name

Your plants,your animals,your people,dazzling with beauty

But one thing i just cant bare,its terrible!The humidity

How I long to hold your small colored grains in my hands, you are now a national park,my seven colored earth

Ive only been able to see you once,I am envious of my parents,theyve been here ever since birth

I long to drown my feet in your clear blue waters

The air every second gets hotter and hotter

These tiny rocks as white as rice,can I hold it in my hands

Your pure tropical snow,the sand

Look at those rainbows of flowers

And the waves!They hit the jagged rocks with such power

Walking through miles of sugar cane fields

Strolling through the outdoor bazar,seeing delicious fruit,you just have to yield

When can I visit you again

When can I see my family whom live on this island

Can I see you soon

When the sun is down and out comes the moon

Soon...

My Paradise
Amazingly, This ones not emo...Hope you like the poem! It's called "Mauritius"?
I really liked your poem and thought you did a really nice job.I would love to see that place where your family is from ' as it sounds lush with flowers and fruits ' totally beautiful. I think this jerk above me knows nothing about poetry as if he did he would know that your a damn good poet and we all know it.... Cami.
Reply:no.

it isn't original.

same old same old.



write something original, happy and not creepy.

I read your poem and i feel dirty.
Reply:Beautifully beautiful!!



Awesomely awesome!!



Great job!! :D :D :D



very descriptive, i like it.
Reply:Very nice. The only thing I can say is it is a litttle wordy. A quick edit will take care of that and you'll have it all polished up. Good Job Grasshopper, Master is pleased. LOL



Ignore the haters. I don't see any of his poetry posted. It is easy to criticize, but difficult to expose one's self.
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